Saturday, May 04, 2002

You’ve already posted six poems, Fobbin. Keep them coming! (We’ll drop the quotes around ‘poetry’ and ‘poems’ for the time being.) You asked me what I thought of them. Here goes:

 First of all, they carry enough of poetic sensibility, I think, to justify their being called poems.
 I have a few quarrels here and there with the punctuation and the language.
 ‘Across the night sky’ was probably the most striking and also the most flawed. The lines on Chintu’s mother are quite good and I liked the title ‘Dreaming inside a cubicle’.